2012년 8월 4일 토요일
About Joseph Kony: The War Didn't End
Throughout history, there have been numerous wars. As we all know, there were not only small wars but also some big wars. Although most of the big wars all ended many decades ago, there are some small wars still going on. Besides, as for the reason why people caused wars, there were so many causes. Some wars were fought for good causes but some wars were fought for selfish causes like to get power, fame and some land. The war I am going to introduce is a war against terrorism in Uganda.
This video is called <Kony 2012>. You might have heard about this video or actually watched it. This video is very viral and popular in 2012. In the first two weeks, so many people (more than 92 million views as of August 2012.) watched this video on You Tube.
As you can notice through it's title, this is about Joseph Kony, the dreadful murderer who was from Uganda.This video deals with the cruel murderer and the painful life of Jacob, a child who escaped from Kony's army. Jason Russell, the co-founder of Invisible children,Inc., made this video to make the people all over the world know Joseph Kony.
I'd like to examine who is Joseph Kony first. He was born in 1961, in northern Uganda. According the Wikipedia, he was a very religious child. But, for some reasons, when he became a teenager, he suddenly quit school and stopped attending church. Soon, he became an adult and made LRA, the Lord's Resistance Army, in 1987. Since then, he kidnapped so many Ugandan children . Besides, he and LRA started to accuse so many cruel and villainous crimes such as murder, making girls child sex slavery, and forcing children to join his army. According to Invisible Children, Inc., he sometimes make the kidnapped children kill their own parents to expand his power in Uganda. Now, he is threatening the peace of the whole global society.
In fact, nowadays, about 3000 children are suffering under Joseph Kony. It is said that in LRA, the kidnapped children are suffering from sexual abuse, violence and threat of being killed. Especially, Jacob, who was the main character of <Kony 2012> was kidnapped by LRA with his brother. His brother, who tried to escape, was killed by LRA soldiers. Jacob went to a safe place where he could meet Jason Russell. However, he suffered from the bad and painful memory for a long time.
All the kids all over the world have the right to live safely and happily. They should not suffer from the damages of being killed or being kidnapped even if they are living in a poor country. All kids have to live in a peaceful and charming world and get good education to achieve their goal.
So far, I briefly examined who is Joseph Kony and what he did. And I also mentioned why we should bring Kony to justice. I strongly believe that we should save Uganda. We should protect Uganda and make the kidnapped children free. Of course, you may think that Joseph Kony and his LRA is not the big problem in Africa. You may think that there are other major problems like a lot of diseases and the children who are suffering from hunger. Nonetheless, we should help the helpless kidnapped children and prevent cruel Joseph Kony from committing crimes. Because, we should give our children a better earth. Because, our children's future should be a brighter one.
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Hi. Your writing TA Sohyeon here. This is a remarkably smooth and fluent piece of writing. I am impressed :)
답글삭제It's good that you try to address the other side of the issue albeit briefly at the very end. You are probably the only one who wrote a support side to KONY 2012, at least from the pieces what I have read so far. You provide an entirely convincing case. Good job!
Additional suggestions: You might want to explore further into why we need to protect the children. Talk about how Uganda does not currently have the governmental power to fully protect/rescue these children. Also talk about what Jason Russel has been doing, if he has been doing anything at all. Talk about how it is important to protect the children. What the children mean to the world. These issues you do briefly address, but focusing on your arguments as well as the facts which speak for themselves could make a better case out of your beliefs.
Overall, very nice.
This is excellent. The best Kony essay I've read so far - and not just from elementary, but also middle school! I think you deserve a green card for your hard work.
답글삭제This is balanced and well written, and full of true facts. You made sure you were accurate. Other students get many facts wrong.
I agree with the TA above - you could mention more about Invisible Children and how the video caused controversy. But this is so good I think you can leave it the way it is.
Excellent work!
One error "quitted" is not a word. Just "quit."
Thank you for your comment and priase, Mr. Garrioch. I will correct the error you mentioned. Besides, thank you for the Green Card you gave me at the 5th period. It was my 5th Green Card but actually, it was the first Green Card I have ever gotton from a teacher.
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